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Acton is a small town which only has population of 2,500, and the town changed less in the past a hundred years. Last month, Stanley Manufacturing decided to open a large factory in Acton. And I think it would be a great choice for the town. There are several reasons below. First, if the large factory opened, it should recruit some employees. That might give more jobs for the dwellers of the town. Second, more people would attracted by the work, this would bring more residents and increase the population of the town. Last, with more occupants are stationed in the town, more new concepts are brought in. For those reasons, I would agree the factory open in Acton.
應該沒什麼問題吧..
回覆刪除沒問題.............吧
回覆刪除Last, with more occupants are stationed in the town, more new concepts are brought in.
回覆刪除這一句，可以補充多一點讓句意更清楚唷唷唷^_^
Second, more people would attracted by the work
回覆刪除would後面要加be噢
more people would "be" attracted by the work
回覆刪除1.First, if the large factory opened, it should recruit some employees.
回覆刪除﹡open應該不用ed
2.Second, more people would attracted by the work...
﹡attracted→be attracted
﹡有些時態不統一，統一一下哦。
以上，淺見…
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回覆刪除我看不到我看不到!
以上~
時態須一致。
回覆刪除Acton is a small town ... in the past a hundred years.＂a＂可以換成＂one＂。
Second, more people would attracted by the work..
應該是＂would be attracted by the work...＂
Last, with more occupants are stationed in the town...
應該是＂with more occupants stationed in the town...＂
For those reasons, I would agree the factory open in Acton.
＂agree＂為不及物動詞；在下試改如下：
＂...I agree to open a factory in Acton.＂
不確定是否符合原意。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
First, if the large factory opened把opened改成opens比較好哦
回覆刪除more people would attracted by the work是would be attracted
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