2011年5月18日 星期三
Comparing-3
There were two series of novels that I have read, one is Millennium Trilogy series, and the other is Watch series. While Watch series are fantasy works, Millennium Trilogy series is a story about venture and humanity actions. Unlike the background of Watch series was happened in London, the background of Millennium Trilogy series was happened in America. And the main characters' personallity of those two series are different from each other. Also, there are four books in Watch series, whereas Millennium Trilogy series have three. Though the two series are quite different, their stories are still very exciting and interesting.
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There were two series of novels that I have read
回覆刪除用There are是不是比較好啊?
There were two series of novels that I have read, one is Millennium Trilogy series
回覆刪除這兩句沒有連接詞
Millennium Trilogy series is a story about venture and humanity actions
series是複數 後面接is感覺很奇怪
was happened
happen沒有被動用法吧
characters' personallity
改成複數會比較好
以上
1.There were two series of novels that I have read, one is Millennium Trilogy series, and the other is Watch series.
回覆刪除→There were two series of novels that I had read; one was Millennium Trilogy series, and the other was Watch series.
2.Unlike the background of Watch series was happened in London, the background of Millennium Trilogy series was happened in America.
→此句參見Contrasting-2
3.既然是There were two novels...，後面時態就統一用過去式比較好，整篇的時態必須整齊哦。
(以上，淺見…)
Watch series was happened in London
回覆刪除happen 沒有被動喔!
下一句也是
我想說一句話
標題comparing是比較"相同"的東西喔!= =
whereas Millennium Trilogy series have three.
回覆刪除一個系列的話，應該用單數＂has＂吧。
然後…覺得時態有點亂，一致會不會比較好呢？
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
時態不一致
回覆刪除unlike的用法...還是同樣的問題
以上
There were two series of novels that I have read, one is Millennium Trilogy series, and the other is Watch series.
回覆刪除I have read,後面沒有連接詞
the background of Millennium Trilogy series was happened in America.
happened要主動哦~~~