I think our government should decrease using nuclear power and increase using natural energy resource. Though many people suggested that using nuclear power is more convenient and the energy it produces is more than that natural energy resource does. But people don’t know that energy produced by nuclear power only occupied less than twenty percent than other ways in Taiwan . Moreover, using nuclear power may cause serious ecological catastrophe for its leakage of radiation. I think develop natural energy resource will become the most important things in future. Because oil might become less and less, and others resources will do so. And natural energy resources will nerve run out or waste money. Take Germany for instance, they had already set many wind turbines in their farm, and a report point out that wind turbines had produced more than fifty percent of energy in it. It is for all the above-mentioned reasons that I believe it will be better to use natural energy resources than nuclear power.
一開頭也太驚人了!!
回覆刪除前面應多加敘述
把自己的觀點擺中間
and others resources will do so.
回覆刪除應該是other resources
they had already set many wind turbines in their farm
farm應該要加s
and a report point out that wind turbines had produced more than fifty percent of energy in it.
point要加ed吧
1.Though many people suggested that using nuclear power is more convenient and the energy it produces is more than that natural energy resource does.
回覆刪除→Though many people suggested that using nuclear power is more convenient and the energy it produces is more than natural energy resource does.
2.But people don’t know that energy produced by nuclear power only occupied less than twenty percent than other ways in Taiwan.
→occupied 怪怪的呢…
3.And natural energy resources will nerve run out or waste money.
→nerve 好像不適合用在這裡…
﹡言之有物,不過時態要記得統一。
以上,淺見。
I think develop natural energy resource will become the most important things in future.
回覆刪除future前面要加the齁(?
And natural energy resources will nerve run out or waste money.
never拼錯摟XD
decrease using nuclear文法是不是怪怪的
回覆刪除還有時態不一至哦
and others resources will do so的other不用s
decrease using nuclear power
回覆刪除找不到後面是加動名詞的用法
我會寫↓
decrease the use of nuclear power
I think develop natural energy resource will become the most important things in future.
回覆刪除裡的develop我會加ING耶!
因為這樣會有了個V
還有要再in和future中間加一個the 啦!
以上~
Though many people suggested...
回覆刪除問一下,"suggested"要用現在式嗎?
But people ...only occupied less than twenty percent than other ways in Taiwan.
再問一下,"occupied"要用現在式嗎?
"other ways"在下覺得要加上"any"。
Because oil... and others resources will do so.
"others"不用加"s"吧。
And natural energy resources...
"And"可以改:
"Besides"、"Furthermore"...
如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。