2011年5月25日 星期三

Expressing on Opinion-1

I think our government should decrease using nuclear power and increase using natural energy resource. Though many people suggested that using nuclear power is more convenient and the energy it produces is more than that natural energy resource does. But people don’t know that energy produced by nuclear power only occupied less than twenty percent than other ways in Taiwan. Moreover, using nuclear power may cause serious ecological catastrophe for its leakage of radiation. I think develop natural energy resource will become the most important things in future. Because oil might become less and less, and others resources will do so. And natural energy resources will nerve run out or waste money. Take Germany for instance, they had already set many wind turbines in their farm, and a report point out that wind turbines had produced more than fifty percent of energy in it. It is for all the above-mentioned reasons that I believe it will be better to use natural energy resources than nuclear power.

8 則留言:

  1. 一開頭也太驚人了!!
    前面應多加敘述
    把自己的觀點擺中間

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  2. and others resources will do so.
    應該是other resources
    they had already set many wind turbines in their farm
    farm應該要加s
    and a report point out that wind turbines had produced more than fifty percent of energy in it.
    point要加ed吧

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  3. 1.Though many people suggested that using nuclear power is more convenient and the energy it produces is more than that natural energy resource does.
    →Though many people suggested that using nuclear power is more convenient and the energy it produces is more than natural energy resource does.
    2.But people don’t know that energy produced by nuclear power only occupied less than twenty percent than other ways in Taiwan.
    →occupied 怪怪的呢…
    3.And natural energy resources will nerve run out or waste money.
    →nerve 好像不適合用在這裡…

    ﹡言之有物,不過時態要記得統一。
     以上,淺見。

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  4. I think develop natural energy resource will become the most important things in future.
    future前面要加the齁(?

    And natural energy resources will nerve run out or waste money.
    never拼錯摟XD

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  5. decrease using nuclear文法是不是怪怪的
    還有時態不一至哦
    and others resources will do so的other不用s

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  6. decrease using nuclear power
    找不到後面是加動名詞的用法
    我會寫↓
    decrease the use of nuclear power

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  7. I think develop natural energy resource will become the most important things in future.
    裡的develop我會加ING耶!
    因為這樣會有了個V
    還有要再in和future中間加一個the 啦!


    以上~

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  8. Though many people suggested...
    問一下,"suggested"要用現在式嗎?

    But people ...only occupied less than twenty percent than other ways in Taiwan.
    再問一下,"occupied"要用現在式嗎?
    "other ways"在下覺得要加上"any"。

    Because oil... and others resources will do so.
    "others"不用加"s"吧。

    And natural energy resources...
    "And"可以改:
    "Besides"、"Furthermore"...

    如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。

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