2011年5月18日 星期三

Contrasting-2

I would hire Debra for the job. Because Debra has more education than Lynn, and that might be easier to make sure her accent is understandable. Also, unlike Debra’s experience is a lot, Lynn’s experience is less. Lynn can speak three other languages fluently while Debra only can speak one other language fluently. But this do not affect much, who I want to hire is an English instructor, not a language professor. For those reasons above, I think Debra is more suitable for this job opening.
張貼者： 篔簹 於 晚上11:19

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  1. 芳珠2011年5月19日 清晨7:33

    Also, unlike Debra’s experience is a lot, Lynn’s experience is less.這句感覺有點怪!
    Debra only can speak one other language fluently. 這邊要other嗎?

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  2. 冠伶2011年5月25日 晚上11:08

    1.主題句有一點點驚人…略述一下背景會比較好。
    2.Because Debra has more education than Lynn, and that might be easier to make sure her accent is understandable.
    →That is because Debra has more education than Lynn, and she might be easier to make sure that her accent is understandable.
    3.Also, unlike Debra’s experience is a lot, Lynn’s experience is less.
    →Also, unlike Debra's extensive experience, Lynn has less one.
    4.But this do not affect much, who I want to hire is an English instructor, not a language professor.
    →However, this does not matter much, what I want to hire is an English instructor, not a language professor.
    (以上，淺見…)

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  3. 宜珍2011年5月25日 晚上11:22

    前面多鋪陳一下
    不然感覺很突然

    Because Debra has more education than Lynn, and that might be easier to make sure her accent is understandable
    這一句感覺很突兀= =

    unlike Debra’s experience is a lot
    unlike沒有這種用法
    後面應該是接名詞而不是子句

    But this do not affect much, who I want to hire is an English instructor, not a language professor
    do應該改成does
    這句感覺很中文式英語
    很local喔~~~
    lo筑!!!

    以上XDDDDD

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  4. 品婷2011年5月28日 上午8:40

    主題具有點突然 建議先描述一下情況\Also, unlike Debra’s experience is a lot,這句文法錯囉 unlike是介系詞
    然後建議可以寫得詳細一點

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  5. 妤如2011年5月29日 上午9:00

    第一句讓在下有種：
    「就選她了！另一個閃邊！」的感覺。
    （抱歉，言之有過）

    Lynn can speak three other languages... while Debra only can speak one other language fluently.
    不太懂＂other＂的用意說，想刪去。

    倒數第二句的關代怪怪的。

    如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。

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  6. 孟萱2011年6月1日 晚上10:59

    Also, unlike Debra’s experience is a lot, Lynn’s experience is less.
    這句感覺說不出來...
    就怪拐的@@

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