2011年4月20日 星期三
Giving Reasons
My favorite holiday is Christmas. First reason is because Christmas makes me feel comfortable ane warm. Family and friends get together to celebrate this holiday. The second reason is that people would change presents to express their love or something others. And changing present is very exciting, because you would never know what you would get. The third reason is that family members would prepare so many delicious food which is not ordinary. With those reasons upon, Christmas is my favorite holiday.
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First reason is ... ane warm. Family and...
回覆刪除應該是＂and＂吧。
我覺得這二句可以用＂for（因為）＂
連接成一句。
The second reason is that...or something others.
在下想將＂something others＂換成
＂other emotions＂。（…會不會很奇怪？）
And changing present..., because you would never...
中間的逗號要刪去吧。
我想把＂would＂（第一個）拿掉。
聖誕節，喜歡♫
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
Christmas makes me feel comfortable "ane" warm. 打錯了嗎??
回覆刪除something others...想表達的東西可以再寫明確一點
大概如此....以上
First reason is because Christmas makes me feel comfortable ane warm.
回覆刪除要用 the first嗎? 還有and打錯了
express their love or something others.
可改成something else吧?
And changing present is very exciting
present要加s吧 因為應該不只一個禮物
With those reasons upon
用these是不是會好一些?
The second reason is that people would change presents to express their love or something others.
回覆刪除something others要改成something else哦:D
作者已經移除這則留言。
回覆刪除because前面好像不加逗點?
回覆刪除然後原因描述可以多一點，感覺有點少。
First reason is because Christmas makes me feel comfortable ane warm
回覆刪除裡的First reason 前面+個the 吧! 還有...
ane是and 吧!XD
The second reason is that people would change presents to express their love or something others.
裡的something others 我會寫something else
以上~
辛苦了!
聖誕節是情人出沒的好節日...
嘖
something others好像有點奇怪...
回覆刪除first reason前面要加the
然後可以敘述的更詳細一點
"And" changing present is very exciting, because you would never know what you would get.
回覆刪除because前面不用逗號
present要加s
我覺得這可以用轉折詞Moreover/Besides/In addition(個人意見)
1.First reason is because Christmas makes me feel comfortable ane warm.
回覆刪除→First reason is that Christmas makes me feel comfortable and warm. (我會想這麼改呢…)
2.The second reason is that people would change presents to express their love or something others.
→The second reason is that people would exchange presents to express their love or "something others". (這看起來就是不原由的怪呢…可是又不曉得要如何改)
3.And changing present is very exciting, because you would never know what you would get.
→However, changing present is very exciting, because you would never know what you would get.
4.With those reasons upon, Christmas is my favorite holiday.
→With those reasons above, Christmas is my favorite holiday.
(以上，淺見…)