2011年4月27日 星期三
Comparing-1
Though John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are born in different period, they still have some characteristics are alike. Both of John Adams and Thomas Jefferson died on July 4, 1826. Similarly, they are important person in the American Revolution. And John Adams is the same president of United States as Thomas Jefferson. Likewise, they are the signer of Declaration of Independence. John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are alike in delegate to the Continental Congress. John Adams had studied and practiced law which is similarly to Thomas Jefferson. I think they only have little difference.
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Though John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are born in different period, they still have some characteristics are alike.
回覆刪除這句的characteristics後面是不是要加個which阿?
感覺這樣比較通順....
我不清楚=口=
John Adams had studied and practiced law which is similarly to Thomas Jefferson.
這裡的similarly應該要改成similar~~
they still have some characteristics are alike
回覆刪除are alike感覺怪怪的>"<
they are important person in the American Revolution.
應該是people
John Adams had studied and practiced law which is similarly to Thomas Jefferson.
應該是similar就好
have some characteristics are alike5這具怪怪的..
回覆刪除they are important person 應該是people吧
還有時態一下用現在式一下用過去式有點奇怪
Likewise, they are the signer of Declaration of Independence.
回覆刪除裡的signer 我會+S喔!
John Adams had studied and practiced law which is similarly to Thomas Jefferson.
裡的which 前面我換+個","
以上~
好趕..
我會加油的((燦笑
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1.Though John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are born in different period, they still have some characteristics are alike.
回覆刪除→Though John Adams and Thomas Jefferson were born in different eras, they still have some characteristics alike.
2.Similarly, they are important person in the American Revolution.
→Similarly, they were important people in the American Revolution.
3.And John Adams is the same president of United States as Thomas Jefferson.
→Besides, John Adams had been the president of United States and Thomas Jefferson as well.
4.Likewise, they are the signer of Declaration of Independence.
→Likewise, they are the signers of Declaration of Independence.
5.John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are alike in delegate to the Continental Congress.
→John Adams and Thomas Jefferson were both delegates to the Continental Congress.
6.John Adams had studied and practiced law which is similarly to Thomas Jefferson.
→John Adams had studied and practiced law, which was similarly to Thomas Jefferson.
7.I think they only have little difference.
→In short, I think they only had little difference.
(以上，淺見…)
我覺得你整篇的時態
回覆刪除都改成過去式
會比較好喔!!!!
And John Adams is the same president of United States as Thomas Jefferson.
這句用法怪怪的
其他的我上面寫得太清楚了
真是不給面子
=3=
整篇用過去式比較好
回覆刪除they are important "person" in the American Revolution.
是people
Though John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are born in different period, they still have some characteristics are alike.
回覆刪除改成＂were born＂。
＂characteristics are alike＂在下想把＂are＂去掉。
Both of John Adams and Thomas Jefferson died ...
＂of＂可以刪去。
John Adams had studied and practiced law which is similarly to Thomas Jefferson.
＂similarly＂→＂similar＂。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
第一句可以改成過去式(are→were)，然後把they still have some characteristics are alike.這邊的are去掉。
回覆刪除最後的結論句前面可以加個To sum up 之類的詞。