2011年3月9日 星期三
An unforgettable trip
It was the winter vacation that I went to Taipei. I woke up at 6 a.m. for I was very excited. This was my first time to have a trip but went without my family. When I got to the passenger transport my friends were already been there and waited for me. On the way to Taipei, I was miserably got carsick due to I ate some cookies. After we arrived Taipei, we went to a display. The display was not only exhibit paintings but also others artistic productions. Until evening, the night market must be one of the most important activities. Just like others passengers, we went to士林 night market, and had eaten many kinds of food. The next day, we went to the book exhibition. There were a lot of people, books, and merchandise of novels. I bought lots of books and merchandise. At 4:00 p.m. we got on a bus back to Tainan. We were all tired when we got back, but it was still an excited trip.
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transport後面加逗點
回覆刪除應該是has already been there
display應該用exhibition比較好吧
應該用ate就可以了吧
There were a lot of people, books, and merchandise of novels and I bought lots of them
比較不饒舌
To 宜珍:
回覆刪除謝謝=ˇ=
When I got to the passenger transport"," my friends were already been there
回覆刪除要有逗點喔！
After we arrived Taipei
arrived in/at 地點
At 4:00 p.m. we got on a bus "back to Tainan"
可改為and returned to Tainan(參考)
my friends were already been there=>were應該改成had哦
回覆刪除I was miserably got carsick due to I ate some cookies=>due to 後面是加名詞哦
After we arrived Taipei=>arrived in Taipei
The display was not only exhibit paintings but also others artistic productions.=>The display exibited not only paintings but also artistic productions.
Until evening, the night market must be one of the most important activities. 這裡應該不能用until
we went to士林 night market, and had eaten many kinds of food=>had eaten應該用ate就好了
1.When I got to the passenger transport my friends were already been there and waited for me.
回覆刪除→When I got to the passenger transport, my friends had already been there and waited for me.
2.After we arrived Taipei, we went to a display.
→After we arrived in/at Taipei, we went to a display.
3.The display was not only exhibit paintings but also others artistic productions.
→The display exhibited not only paintings but also other artistic productions.
4.We were all tired when we got back, but it was still an excited trip.
→We were all tired when we got back, but it was still an exciting trip.
(以上，淺見…)
When I got to the passenger transport ~ me.
回覆刪除transport後面要+個逗點
The display ~ productions.
我覺得應該要改成..
There were not only exhibit paintings but also others artistic productions in the display.
Just like others passengers,
other當形容詞不用+s哦~~
我也想跟朋友自己出去旅行~~~
When I got to the passenger transport my friends were already been there and waited for me.
回覆刪除transport後面應該要加逗號
After we arrived Taipei
arrived 後面應該要加介係詞吧
others artistic productions
others應該是other
others passengers 這個也是other就好了吧?
Just like others passengers, we went to士林 night market, and had eaten many kinds of food.
回覆刪除這邊 had eaten 寫ate就好了。
After we arrived Taipei, we went to a display.
這邊的display是指什麼呢? 你們去了兩個不同的展覽嗎?
因為你後面又寫了The next day, we went to the book exhibition. 所以我有點不懂= =
以上。
To 以上所有人:
回覆刪除謝謝指教=ˇ=
To 姜姜:
我們是去了兩個不同的展覽沒錯喔
1...my friends were already been .../
回覆刪除2not only...but also/
3Until.../
4...had eaten.../
那幾句的問題前面的大人都有說了，不再多言。
This was my first time to have a trip but went without my family.
－－我一直在想，＂went＂的意思是說：
＂ This was my first time to go without my family. ＂嗎？
如果是的話，＂went＂就要改回原形了吧★
Just like others passengers...
我覺得＂other＂不用加 s 吔。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。